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Post by windfog on Sept 9, 2013 8:35:29 GMT -5
Silvery freckles, Covered a Night's unflappable face, Are fascinating. Autumn.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Sept 14, 2013 19:06:03 GMT -5
The first two lines could stand alone. I love the imagery of it.
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Post by windfog on Sept 17, 2013 23:43:53 GMT -5
Thank you my friend! You know, such deep and clear sky covered Jerusalem at night! Maybe because it stays 600 - 800 m. above the sea level? W.F.
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Post by Aish on Oct 29, 2013 15:17:39 GMT -5
" Covered" should be " covering".
I love your snapshots of Jerusalem. Autumn nights are my personal favourite.
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Post by Bastet on Nov 1, 2013 16:10:20 GMT -5
I think Autumn should be the title. It isn't needed at the end. Aish is right, covering is the proper grammar. It's a pretty little piece.
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Post by Moonstone Maiden on Nov 1, 2013 23:17:52 GMT -5
I read this yesterday & was meaning to comment, but I must have been distracted. My favourite part of this piece is the physical ebb & flow. Thanks for sharing with us
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Post by atehequa on May 16, 2014 19:08:26 GMT -5
Superb read.
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