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Post by windfog on Aug 21, 2013 1:09:24 GMT -5
A midnight, wounded by artificial lights, Brought mutilated darkness, rotten fears, vague anxiety. - cats must be killed - Soon will be dawn with healthy brightness, fresh fears, actual anxiety. Banzai!
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Aug 21, 2013 21:40:59 GMT -5
"Banzai! " LMAO!!! I love the opening lines. The relationship of L3 seems a stretch but its placement feels so right. And with just a moment of thought, its metaphor transcends the three lines into a philosophy. Well done.
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Post by windfog on Aug 22, 2013 10:49:42 GMT -5
Thank you, my friend! Yes, "Banzai!", Ha-ha! I wrote this piece at work when I was just exhausted with heat and time. And feel myself exactly like a "ronin-rat", Ha-ha! At least I think so ... Best regards, W.F. Banzai!
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