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Post by Aish on Jun 15, 2013 19:45:35 GMT -5
The whisper is a command "Open, woman, open to remember beauty." The quiet is a desire "Open woman, open to remember naked fire before death comes in little waves wet mouths full of voodoo, briny hands sculpting lava gingerly as slip."
Woman concedes, recedes, peels back.
The need asserts itself fusing our supine spines into lovers. Seeds of night poems transcend graphite growing glass spiders with gangly legs spelunking through our ribcage, bodies becoming ovens of psalms the unknown lying unspent between our limbs.
Words metastasize into moonlight.
With slight of hand I wind back the dawn tumbling where the tallow dripped untamed giving again and again and again as we rise and fall, gift and destroy pressing petals against the living flame.
Mistress orb weaver spins her silk and with kinetic motion confined we sigh, coiling against wax zippers gathering sustenance until the muse awakens bruised tender from too much sleep and begins the holy hissing kiss "Open, woman, open..."
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Post by windfog on Jun 15, 2013 23:48:50 GMT -5
Sophisticated piece, lady! It can be read at least in two dimensions. Poet & lover. Or lover & poet. I like it. W.F.
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Post by Aish on Jun 16, 2013 1:06:33 GMT -5
Thank you, Ris!! I enjoyed layering it
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Post by twistedangel on Jun 16, 2013 1:33:28 GMT -5
Sometimes I feel a bit guilty cos I ain't commented much on any of you poems... Soz about that Truth is I guess am a bit 'overawed' by it an think am just gonna look dumb if I try to comment Love the title think is perfect and am happy I got the poet/lover relationship Ris mentioned IMO a very clever write...I adore the word choice ...I still struggle to understand all the imagery within this is a bit of a sensory bombardment but a really cool one It's given me headache trying to unravel this enigma of words...but have really enjoyed it
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Jun 16, 2013 5:34:10 GMT -5
Hi Aish As always your work is so moving. Your word choices are always nothing short of amazing but your word combinations in this are unusual even for you. I love the whole blooming aspect repeated throughout and ending so... caressingly. The layers and levels tell at least two stories and I'll probably find more as I read it again and again. Subtly sexy.
I always love reading you. Thanks.
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Post by Aish on Jun 18, 2013 21:45:21 GMT -5
Angel, please don't ever hesitate on these forums. Tell me what works, but please Please tell me what doesn't work so I can fix it. If nothing else it creates good back and forth dialouge so we can each see where the other is coming from. I'm really hapy you acclimated to being here and stayed. I don't even know how to respond to the rest of that. Thank you. I know what I do is not everyone's cup of tea.
LF, thank you as always. This is pretty multi dimensional for me, but it was as honest as I could be. This is, literally, my creative process.
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Post by markusmagellus on Nov 7, 2013 1:28:44 GMT -5
The creative impulse is very strong. This is the best way I've ever seen it " explained".
I could really picture a woman bent over a writing desk with tiny glass spiders on her. Very cool read.
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