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Mar 17, 2013 3:56:07 GMT -5
Post by Deleted on Mar 17, 2013 3:56:07 GMT -5
I've got you now
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siksimon
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Mar 17, 2013 4:10:31 GMT -5
Post by siksimon on Mar 17, 2013 4:10:31 GMT -5
I liked it alot, it is completed and long and that gives it a wonderful musical quality. The second line begins with the word "In," and this is a preposition. I would not suggest tbat you begin or end line in prepositions, though it is ok for a rough draft.
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