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Post by LonelyForsaken on Oct 18, 2011 15:37:02 GMT -5
Between Breaths
...this moment, between… what could be and what is.
It all stops - Time and space lose cohesion and one walks alone
in a world between breaths where inside exists a vast cavern, frozen, paused, motionless on all sides, imanent change ceases.
Where vision is sharp yet hues are soft. Flavor explodes in a tasteless world. Deaf, yet a pin drop holds everything and I exist only between breaths.
Purple midnight silence exists counter to this salty wind when time is frozen and dawn is so far away.
When yesterday is lost, today is unwelcome, and this moment... immovable,
...will breath ever come?
LonelyForsaken
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Post by Veritas on Oct 21, 2011 0:33:31 GMT -5
"Imanent change ceases" "where vision is sharp yet it's hues soft". "With time frozen & dawn so far away" "when uesterdays lost and today is unwelcome" " ... This\the moment... IMMOVABLE " I find myself drawn to this piece? Have more to say but my mind or words elude me, at the mo.
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Post by Aish on Oct 21, 2011 0:43:09 GMT -5
This is truthfull - painfully so. I find myself catching my breath, wishing I had written it.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Oct 21, 2011 18:55:37 GMT -5
Thank you my friends. Is clarity of thought an inebriation? At times like this I think it is. There are concepts that are impossible to express with words alone and pain that cannot be expressed at all but there are some who recognize it anyway. Once felt, once grasped and lived, it is easy to see in another. It is more than empathy. It is… family in the truest form. This is not a good expression of what I wish to convey but occasionally I do find the word combinations that are good enough. Chrys – Thank you! I cannot express what your compliment means to me. I did not think it was so good. Veritas – I know how short words fall in this. It is enough that I know you understand.
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Post by atomicparakeet on Oct 29, 2011 12:28:17 GMT -5
The opening stanza is breathtaking. Simple, but so universal.
I will read this a few more times.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Oct 29, 2011 22:19:09 GMT -5
:-) Thank you.
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