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Post by shadowsedge on May 27, 2011 22:32:17 GMT -5
In truth I do spill these words Onto this paper with ease I have no rhymes nor rhyhtm to please This paper shall comfort me and calm my dis ease Some may complain But my writing - RAAAA!! See, this is what comes! I care not for the critiques you give So troubled I am Why do I care about you? To death I'll see you go one dip at a time and for the one that I care your life is safe with me AAAHHH!! from where does this rage come god help me, am I so dumb? fear not I'll comfort your like it or not because I Love You more than you know more than you can see I'll love you for ever & ever you'll see
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Post by LonelyForsaken on May 28, 2011 0:45:12 GMT -5
Thanks man. I’m all choked up. You miss someone very much too don’t you?
“nor rhyhtm to please” spelling –rhythm “I'll comfort your” your should be you. “for ever & ever” forever and ever
The last part really hits home and I rewrote it just a bit;
“Fear not I'll comfort you like it or not because I Love you more than you know more than you see I'll love you forever and ever you'll see”
Forever and ever is a long time to some people but not long enough for us.
Thank you so much for sharing this my friend.
LonelyForsaken
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Post by Aish on May 29, 2011 4:46:26 GMT -5
Shadowsedge,
The rules here clearly state you need to be leaving 3 replies for each poem you post. As long as you maintain a 2/1 ratio I won't complain.
If you are going to continue to be a member here I strongly suggest you become involved with the boards. You have 8 posts, only one of them is a reply and it isn't constructive.
-Chrys
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