AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
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Post by AxXis on Oct 17, 2008 0:19:41 GMT -5
Our Strangulation screaching Sliced wrist orgasm revolutionary
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Post by <strip> on Oct 25, 2010 14:12:54 GMT -5
For such a short poem strangulation and cutting seems like a lot to throw in there. Potent piece nonetheless. Caught me off guard.
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AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
Posts: 218
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Post by AxXis on Aug 27, 2011 9:04:12 GMT -5
shoulda spend more time on this really. I am definately one of those over the top people though, always trying to push my descriptions. Nevertheless you are ABSOLUTELY right. Especially the sliced wrist thing. I may come back to this one but the shortest poems seem to require the upmost perfect words. Thanks for the feedback.
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AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
Posts: 218
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Post by AxXis on May 2, 2013 16:14:04 GMT -5
Our strangulation breathless fear offers climax revolutionary
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Post by twistedangel on May 3, 2013 10:13:28 GMT -5
deffo prefer the re-write...makes more sense cool senryu
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