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Post by :.:.:KrO NiC DaZe:.:.: on Dec 30, 2003 15:36:18 GMT -5
[glow=black,2,300]" The voice Of Reason "
Does it hurt? Is tha pain too much? Does that make it better? Tha cold steel touch? Don't forget ta breath Don't cut too deep Stay controlled Watch tha pain seep
Open the bottle Take a few more It will numb the pain That you feel to the core
One more hit Should make it all okay Do you hear me? Listen to what I say! I know the answers To get rid of the pain I'll make you feel good And keep you sane
Pick up the knife Just one more cut Remember what they said, Are you that slut?
Take another drink Hit the bottle hard Feel the pain sink Do you feel that? The burn of the rum Take another shot Come on, don't be dumb
Alright this is it Bring it all back You can't forget Pick up the gun Don't be a bitch!!!! Okay it's all over....
Face down in the ditch....[/glow]
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CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
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Post by CrimsonAngel on Dec 30, 2003 15:48:57 GMT -5
wow....I really like this one....I can see it all happening....this ones really good....nice work!!
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Dec 30, 2003 17:16:14 GMT -5
very powerful words. wicked rhythm.. almost sounds like a song to me.
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Post by black jewelled rain on Jan 7, 2004 0:14:43 GMT -5
It's a really startling poem. You conveyed your message particulalarly well. It's something I think everyone here can relate to.
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