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Let Go
Dec 12, 2003 8:32:24 GMT -5
Post by caramell11586 on Dec 12, 2003 8:32:24 GMT -5
Eyes glassed over Ready to let the tears of her past Glide down to the forgotten And she stops She can't let go Her heart would wither to a nothing As she drained her soul empty The thought of no emotion Brings her heart to a still She has so little already She can't let go But something inside Deep inside Wants her to stop the pain And feel nothing Emotionally paralyzed But she can't let go She wants to hold But no one's helping her keep her grip She feels her fingers losing grip with reality She has no choice She must let go
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Let Go
Dec 12, 2003 22:02:21 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 12, 2003 22:02:21 GMT -5
Another very well written poem. I like how you repeated the line 'She can't let go' several times, changing it at the very end to 'She must let go'. It somehow tied the whole thing together very nicely. I love your style.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Let Go
Dec 22, 2003 17:46:47 GMT -5
Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 17:46:47 GMT -5
Very emotive. I can relate to this poem a lot. You really have a very unique style that is excellent...
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