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Funeral
Dec 11, 2003 16:40:28 GMT -5
Post by caramell11586 on Dec 11, 2003 16:40:28 GMT -5
Echoes stir throughout the funeral home As the world lays you down to sleep Your eternal slumber Drowning in my loss for you My heart begins losing breath And gasping for something not there I have lost my one true Silk raindrops fall from the eyes of all As we realize you’ll never be back Gone forever In the earth you shall rest
No more dancing nights With the blood As our music And knives As everlasting lights
Retired are the times We stared into the reflecting eyes Raveling malignant disfigurement To the alluring silhouette that stands before But only others seem too see this beauty
Departed are the evenings We sat up together Insomnious dreams swinging normality With the vines of myth Till dawn’s lips kissed our broken skin
Great times
Emotion dries up as a crimson flower To frost’s good morn In the last glimpse of you That I see Before you are locked away forever In the wooden bed of infinity
It is closed And my heart’s frigid to any helping soul We finally depart As you are lowered to withered tear soaked dirt And I Walk to the figure that shall soon be my past.
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Funeral
Dec 12, 2003 0:44:27 GMT -5
Post by _black phoenix_ on Dec 12, 2003 0:44:27 GMT -5
that was beautiful. i dont know what to say.. the imagery in this piece took my breath away..
"silk raindrops fall from the eyes of all"
"dawns lips kissed our broken skin"
the last two stanzas were incredible. you truly have skill, my dear caramell. thank you for sharing that masterpiece with us. i enjoyed it much.
welcome to dark star.
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Funeral
Dec 12, 2003 8:16:42 GMT -5
Post by Caramell11586 on Dec 12, 2003 8:16:42 GMT -5
Thank you.
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Funeral
Dec 12, 2003 21:59:19 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 12, 2003 21:59:19 GMT -5
A very serene piece. I agree that your use of imagery is very skilled:
Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Funeral
Dec 22, 2003 18:11:40 GMT -5
Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 18:11:40 GMT -5
Simply beautiful imagery. It is very touching and well written. You have an extraoridanary talent...
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