CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
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Post by CrimsonAngel on Nov 24, 2003 1:24:01 GMT -5
Close my eyes and cry And slit my wrist Put on a sweatshirt Two friends who I thought Would never tell Let my bloody secret seep out And the next thing I know....
Their asking me why, Why did I do it? Why am I depressed? Why did I let it get so bad? But to all of these questions I have no answer
The doctors with P.H.D's Can they tell me whats wrong? Or is it all fine Cause on the outside My life looks like a fairytale
Does anyone want to cut open my emotions And take a look at the inside Emotions are sick and I'm tired of this No amount of trying to bleed it out will help
I let the doctors do their job And tell them what they want to hear Then I go home And live the same life I did before
~Note~I wrote this night after I got home from the mental hospital.....they said I had some "issues" WELL NO SHIT! I could have told them that one, so in the end I made up lies and excuses so I could just go home....
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Nov 25, 2003 13:28:09 GMT -5
wicked job. i especially liked this stanza..
"does anyone want to cut open my emotions and take a look at the inside emotions are sick and tired of this no amount of trying to bleed it out will help"
well done. keep up the awesome work.
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Post by Lina Inverse on Dec 6, 2003 19:54:47 GMT -5
Interesting. I felt so much better after going to the hospital, and it helped me a lot.
But the first part I can relate to. So many people are good in their intentions, but end up making things worse. I can count my health teacher as one of them. She made me so uncomfortable sitting their talking about the "facts" of depression, including some that I knew weren't true. Having to hide my situation and therefore not being able to speak up and contradict her made it hurt even worse.....
*sudden idea* My experience with depression, self-harm, and suicide is a lot like my experience with being homosexual, except for the fact that gay people are actually recognized as being on the receiving end of harassment and that I'm out about my sexuality. I wonder if I can turn this idea into a poem?
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 9, 2003 21:56:50 GMT -5
I liked the idea of the secret 'seeping' out, reminiscent of the blood. Watch out for spelling mistakes and cliches like "sick and tired". However, your writing shows great promise!
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 20:37:07 GMT -5
But don't we all have issues? Some have more than others, but in the end everyone has issues. Doctors can really be useless at times. They're way overpayed...
As for the poem, it's great. I liked how it flowed...
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CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
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Post by CrimsonAngel on Dec 24, 2003 12:04:42 GMT -5
I really appreciate the comments......and yeah, I guess we all have problems....but I hate how doctors say they understand....cause doctors don't understand, unless they were a teenager who had to live through the aftermath of trying to kill themself
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Post by Forsaken on Dec 27, 2003 21:53:35 GMT -5
I know exactly what you've been through. I was once in a mental hospital. I've done the cutting before. People have told me several times that I have issues too. By the way, I love the poem. What you said about the doctors saying they know what it's like to go through what we've gone through and still do go through is true. They don't know. Not unless they've gone through the same shit that we have. Otherwise they're spouting bullshit. Anyway, great job on the poem. Loved it, keep posting more work!
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