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Post by Lina Inverse on Nov 15, 2003 19:56:26 GMT -5
Only Chance Knows
Ever since that one October afternoon Every day a struggle Every day a brush with death.
How long will this continue? Till tomorrow? Till age eighty?
Only chance knows.
Four years How I survived them I do not know.
Two times. How many more? When will I try again? When will I succeed?
Only chance knows.
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Post by Saxon shadow on Nov 15, 2003 20:06:49 GMT -5
Not sure about your choice of title, I did enjoy the mood in this piece. Unfortunately, we all of us, belong to time, good work my friend, BG
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 3, 2003 15:58:43 GMT -5
Very effective piece of writing. I really liked these lines:
I think these lines were the key to understanding the whole poem. I liked alot ;D
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Post by Lina Inverse on Dec 5, 2003 22:09:12 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback.
Do you have any better title suggestions?
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 21:11:28 GMT -5
I think a good title for this piece would be "Time after Time" I really like this piece though. The emotion behind it and the reality and great...
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