DarkenTheSky
Demon Disciple
Beneath the Watery Lust Garden, my Secret Lies. . .
Posts: 392
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Post by DarkenTheSky on Nov 10, 2003 5:49:03 GMT -5
I feel sick and lonely, Dead and only Barely breathing, Cutting skin To drink my blood.
I am immortal, Broken portal. Can't go back With life intact, Want to die, Just need to try,
Give me my knife, And say Good-bye. . .
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Post by Lina Inverse on Nov 15, 2003 19:55:48 GMT -5
Ooo... cutting yourself to drink the blood. Sounds fun!
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Post by Saxon shadow on Nov 15, 2003 20:12:42 GMT -5
I quite enjoyed the run in this work, I will read this one again, BG
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 3, 2003 16:02:13 GMT -5
I liked how the first two lines in the first and second stanza rhymed so cleverly. The whole poem flowed well and make a good read. Great work!
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
Posts: 405
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 21:19:44 GMT -5
Unique flow and structure to it. Very intensive meaning. Not bad...
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