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Post by DarkRose29 on Nov 9, 2003 1:52:30 GMT -5
They ask me why I do the things I do to myself. I come up with nonsense reasons and they believe them, but there is no excuse for all these scars. Three small slits appear overnight on my wrist. My body is numb so I can't feel the knife as it slides swiftly into my skin. I focus on the blood as it drips down my arm, it's the only thing thats real. I think you should know what I do, but how will you react? I want you to help, but I can't overcome my fear that you might not be as I thought. How do I know that you won't get scared and back away as people have done before? I think if you saw the maks on my arms you would know they're because of you. The things you said stung deep down and left a scar no one can see, but I can feel it, burning inside me. Too many people know my secret, I thought I could trust my friends, but they would just turn around and stab me in the back. Sometimes I wish they really would, because then I would leave this Hell that you call life. If tomorrow would start without me would you care? Would you even notice I was gone? Would there be tears falling besides my own? Why do I make myself suffer like this? I want you to tell me that you care, that you'll be there if I need someone. I want to call you my own, for you to hold me. There is nothing I wouldn't do for you. I've dealt with this pain so you could be happy. I've shed blood and thousands of tears because you're not happy with me. I tried to be perfect, but I guess what I am just isn't good enough for you.TEXTTEXT
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Post by Lina Inverse on Nov 9, 2003 2:44:35 GMT -5
I can completely relate to this piece. Good job.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Nov 9, 2003 12:58:14 GMT -5
welcome to dark star, darkrose! im happy that you decided to join. great vent. i especially liked the lines "if tomorrow would start without me would you care?" thanks for sharing your work with us, we look forward to more.
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CrimsonTears
Crimson Soul
YOU smashed up my sanity
Posts: 97
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Post by CrimsonTears on Nov 18, 2003 11:38:27 GMT -5
This is the BEST f*ckING poem i have EVER read. Good Job TEXT
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AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
Posts: 218
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Post by AxXis on Nov 20, 2003 23:50:38 GMT -5
wow this is getting pretty deep. I have a hard time writing some things. Thanks, this helps a lot.
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 9, 2003 8:41:13 GMT -5
Out of the whole poem, the words that really stood out to me were "I want you to help". I don't think this is a vent at all. I think this is asking for help, like everyone else here is. This is backed up by the lines:
"If tomorrow would start without me would you care? Would you even notice I was gone? Would there be tears falling besides my own?"
At the end of the day, all we want is someone to stop and help. I liked the idea that you're doing all this for someone else. A very emotive poem.
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Post by caramell11586 on Dec 14, 2003 19:28:14 GMT -5
Awesome..I'm speachless
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 15:05:27 GMT -5
I am also speechless on this one...
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