CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
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Oct 26, 2003 17:28:54 GMT -5
Post by CrimsonAngel on Oct 26, 2003 17:28:54 GMT -5
Explain again to me Why I can’t push it away Explain again to me Why I can’t live through the day
Help me understand again Why I can’t change fate Help me understand again Why I can’t hold back self-hate
Make me believe again In something that is real Make me believe again In a life that I could feel
Explain again to me Why flashbacks run me over Explain again to me Why my heart is never sober
Help me understand again Why I’m always drunk off my depression Help me understand again Why my internal demons are my obsession
Make me believe again In a future where I can smile Make me believe again That I can live alone for a while
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Nov 7, 2003 21:47:36 GMT -5
Post by Lina Inverse on Nov 7, 2003 21:47:36 GMT -5
The repetition worked wonderfully in this poem. I especially loved the first and fourth stanzas.
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Dec 3, 2003 15:29:29 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 3, 2003 15:29:29 GMT -5
A very true and honest poem. I loved how the first and third lines of your stanzas were the same. It was very effective. And how the first three stanzas reflected the last three. You've obviously thought about the structure. Great poem.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Dec 22, 2003 21:35:56 GMT -5
Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 21:35:56 GMT -5
Usually repitition can be a total pain in the ass, but in this case, it worked out wonderfully. Very well written...
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