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Stolen
Oct 23, 2003 19:30:00 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 23, 2003 19:30:00 GMT -5
My tormented being screams out in pain. I'm losing my mind, I'm going insane. As my life collapsed, I suffocated, And out of everything it's you I hated.
You took my hopes and dreams away from me. You blinded me so I could not see. You left me tortured and murdered within, Desperate to drag the blade across my skin.
The world has changed, it's black and twisted, And through this nightmare my mind has drifted: I'm falling, I'm drowning, I'm going to die. Yet no one can hear my fearful cries.
Now with this hurt I cannot cope, For you have stolen my every last hope. I long for my one final breath. I long for my approaching death.
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Stolen
Oct 24, 2003 10:45:54 GMT -5
Post by xxslavexbugxx on Oct 24, 2003 10:45:54 GMT -5
I like that poem a lot.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
Posts: 405
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Stolen
Dec 22, 2003 22:30:38 GMT -5
Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 22:30:38 GMT -5
Very emotive and full of imagery. I love how it makes me feel as though you were writing from my own sense of view. Simply beautiful...
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Stolen
Dec 23, 2003 0:15:47 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 23, 2003 0:15:47 GMT -5
Thankyou! It's probably something everyone can relate to, although I wrote this after a very specific relationship that went wrong.
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CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
Posts: 305
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Stolen
Dec 23, 2003 21:32:25 GMT -5
Post by CrimsonAngel on Dec 23, 2003 21:32:25 GMT -5
really nice work....I love this one....
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Stolen
Dec 24, 2003 0:13:49 GMT -5
Post by lostandalone on Dec 24, 2003 0:13:49 GMT -5
it is sorta freeky but that poem gave me a feeling you know when you fall or die in a dream and you get that tingling sensation, with the deep pit in your stomach? that's what it felt like
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Stolen
Dec 24, 2003 21:18:19 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 24, 2003 21:18:19 GMT -5
I know what you mean. Strangely enough, that's exactly the same feeling you get when in love. So it's official. Love is torture! Thanks for the compliments, guys.
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Stolen
Dec 26, 2003 1:50:22 GMT -5
Post by lostandalone on Dec 26, 2003 1:50:22 GMT -5
never been in love, only lust *sigh* i want to though
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CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
Posts: 305
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Stolen
Dec 26, 2003 2:16:17 GMT -5
Post by CrimsonAngel on Dec 26, 2003 2:16:17 GMT -5
never been in love, only lust *sigh* i want to though Love is the best and worst thing in the world.....it can make your life wonderful, but it can also destroy you
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Stolen
Dec 26, 2003 22:14:31 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 26, 2003 22:14:31 GMT -5
To be honest, I'm not always sure that love is worth it. Things are great for a while, sure. But that doesn't last long. Then it starts to consume you, eating you out from the inside. Eventually, it leaves you hollow and dead. That's what this poem is about.
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