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Post by Lina Inverse on Oct 12, 2003 16:36:20 GMT -5
f*cking life Chained down to it Because of that dorky promise Why the f*ck can't I die?
Leave this shitty world The selfishness The hate The lies
We all surrender ourselves To a pathetic evil Just to survive. Got to to stay alive.
But why live In a world of betrayal? In a world of loneliness? In a world of pain?
Not just easier to die. More desirable, More courageous, More beneficial.
Fear of nonexistence. How pathetic. Existence, evil; nonexistence, good. Why do people fear what's right?
I'll never understand Those who hang on To the tiny shimmering thread Commonly known as
Hope
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Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 13, 2003 12:46:11 GMT -5
I loved the way you placed the last word. It was a very very effective conclusion to a very moving poem! Normally, I don't swear in poems, but sometimes, as you have demonstrated, it can really add to it. It seems to sum up everything I feel about life. Very well written work.
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Post by Lina Inverse on Oct 13, 2003 19:44:02 GMT -5
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
I actually don't relate to it so much any more... My antidepressants have been working...
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Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 14, 2003 20:16:53 GMT -5
Hmm...I'm sorry to hear that you were bad enough to need antidepressants, but I'm glad they're working for you. I've just come off mine after 2 years, and I'm starting to sink again. But they definately helped for a time.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 22:59:44 GMT -5
Sometimes hope is all that lives within us. Sure, hope is nothing compared to the bigger picture, but overall nothing can be done about fate...
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CrimsonAngel
Demon Disciple
.Fallen from the broken gates of heaven
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Post by CrimsonAngel on Dec 24, 2003 11:44:32 GMT -5
I really liked this piece.....it was really good....I cna really relate to it, it brought a tear to my eye...nice work...its awesome
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