|
Post by _black phoenix_ on Feb 12, 2004 13:32:15 GMT -5
im feeling a little unstable, on the verge of im not sure EXPLODING!? caving in to my rage and just letting it all out.
it would feel so good just to rip her TO f*ckING SHREDS and not care at all.
f*ck THE CONSEQUENCES.
i hunger for her pain, blood and raw fear and the realization that she cant be having whats not hers to begin with.
f*ck
f*ck f*ck i cant cope. its driving me up the wall. i want to f*cking scream. i want to gouge the little pink hearts
right from her eye sockets and spit them back at her.
_________ yeah.. the last few days have been a little rough. im not entirely done with this piece yet.. ill probably make some revisions and add more to the end later.
thanks for reading.
|
|
SirAcorn
Dark Initiate
Your poetry does not belong to you, you belong to your poetry. ~Me
Posts: 52
|
Post by SirAcorn on Feb 13, 2004 9:05:45 GMT -5
f*ck!(<--pun intended ;D) great job pheonix. if this is like, a real emotion, then, once again, f*ck! i have never seen your work before and this is a good start, i think. [glow=red,2,300]f*ck THE CONSEQUENCES [/glow]I like it. good job Acorn ps, this doesnt have to do w/ valentines day at all does it?
|
|
|
Post by _black phoenix_ on Feb 13, 2004 14:51:41 GMT -5
not in the least. valentines day is too f*cking comercialized to be of any importance anyways. its all about rich guys making money off of $7 cards and over-priced flowers. ever notice how roses somehow become four times the price this time of year? .. those bastards.
i wrote this piece after awakening from a really bad dream where this chick was trying to kill me(shes actually a girl that i know that wants to get with my boyfriend.) then when i had thought i had woken up from my dream i walked into my room and she was f*cking him. it was all a dream, but it still managed to piss me right off and make me upset for the entire day. ive been having nightmares and dreams like this every night for quite a while now. im sure i would be a much happier person without them.
|
|
AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
Posts: 218
|
Post by AxXis on Feb 16, 2004 23:46:01 GMT -5
Great vent! I like how you put the 'f*ck's on a line by themselves. To me this repetition put emphasis on the fact that your thinking about the consequences but your having to tell yourself that you don't care. Like talking yourself into being sadistik. Thanks for sharing.
|
|
eXrayi
Crimson Soul
an eye 4 an eye an a toof 4 the troof!!
Posts: 97
|
Post by eXrayi on Feb 22, 2004 6:07:02 GMT -5
wow u sound as tho your really mad BP.
f*ck
f*ck
f*ck i cant cope
this kinda sez it all. but u coped with the poem alright i think. i wouldnt change it. i kinda like it as it is.
and i wouldnt want to cross u in a stinkin mood like that. mercy!
|
|