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harmony
Feb 7, 2005 20:32:18 GMT -5
Post by Morning March on Feb 7, 2005 20:32:18 GMT -5
Harmony
Harmony sits, on a chair beside the window Casts her shadow, behind her wicked blindfold Certainly, but how I guess we’ll never know “Truthfully,” she says, “I wish that you’d just let me go.”
She gets up, to look outside her window Sunlight flows, but yesterday it feels so cold Certainly, but when I guess we’ll never know “Truthfully,” she says, “I pray for you to let me go.”
Harmony goes, outside to feel the sun’s rays Silently she creeps out of the life in her glass cage Never before felt the warmth of sunlight’s touch Like an innocent, the burning feels a bit too much
She cries, joyful is the hand of warmth She falls, for blindly she had ventured forth She screams, if only to be stifled fast She drowns, within the greenness of the grass
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harmony
Feb 7, 2005 21:58:29 GMT -5
Post by carpenoctern on Feb 7, 2005 21:58:29 GMT -5
I liked this, I think it would make a good song. I'm listenting to a song right now and i can kind of hear the words of yours going along with it.
Nice
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harmony
Feb 8, 2005 17:55:44 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Feb 8, 2005 17:55:44 GMT -5
interesting song...but I think it needs a bit more, the emotion could use a bit more developing, and you'd have a great song...loved the third stanza, great stuff!
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harmony
Feb 11, 2005 19:51:28 GMT -5
Post by _black phoenix_ on Feb 11, 2005 19:51:28 GMT -5
more emotion? naw.. the third stanza has plenty! ;D
i always enjoy reading your lyrics.. different style than most. definitely enjoyable.
i suck at leaving feedback lately. hope this will suffice.
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