Anita
Demon Disciple
Take The Hurt To The Core Of My Heart and Feel it Bleeding, Pounding,Coming Apart.
Posts: 327
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Post by Anita on Jan 16, 2005 13:22:56 GMT -5
Congestion
I sold myself into the harsh world of humans. A trade I cannot undo If only I knew men
I’d never stoop so low as to be given birth And live this life and sow the seeds of frailty and hurt.
Chorus:
Into my soul there’s been an intrusion. I don’t want to know I don’t need blood transfusion. A desperate congestion is my last strain,my final passion…
Won’t you let me fly…
Life left me feeling so drained of vitality. All I ever had was my faith healing in a faithless reality
Where nothing is real. Where everyone’s an intruder Trespassing upon the sacred so poorly concealed. Yelling I want them out:it,him,you,her!
Chorus:
Into my soul there’s been an intrusion. I don’t want to know I don’t need blood transfusion. A desperate congestion is my last strain,my final passion…
Won’t you let me fly…
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Post by carpenoctern on Jan 16, 2005 13:29:09 GMT -5
WoW! This is some really great stuff, I've got to say. I'm listening to a song right now, and I can hear your words fitting in place of the lyrics. In my opinion that means that you did a really good job. It also looks like you put a lot of thought into this. is my last strain,my final passion…This one line seems to stand out in your chorus. There is just some sort of blunt truth there that holds something really special for me. Great job, once again
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Anita
Demon Disciple
Take The Hurt To The Core Of My Heart and Feel it Bleeding, Pounding,Coming Apart.
Posts: 327
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Post by Anita on Jan 17, 2005 13:47:35 GMT -5
Thank you,Carpe, I really appreciate it,it means a lot to me!
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Post by Yossarian on Jan 17, 2005 16:28:23 GMT -5
It's hard to put my finger on what I liked about this, but I did like this, quite a lot...it sounds like some of the songs that I listen to, very Depeche Mode-ish...the chorus was very nicely worded, very nicely done!
yossarian
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Anita
Demon Disciple
Take The Hurt To The Core Of My Heart and Feel it Bleeding, Pounding,Coming Apart.
Posts: 327
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Post by Anita on Jan 17, 2005 16:39:29 GMT -5
Finally ! NOw I'm smiling ... Thank you so much
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