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Post by Yossarian on Nov 24, 2004 7:18:56 GMT -5
I winced when I read this....remember, while rhyming is nice, YOU DON'T HAVE TO RHYME! And if you really want it to rhyme, make sure that the sentences make sense and are relevant to the rest of the poem. (The ones above don't even make sense...I mean, "Charging forward to make the desire"?? Please!)
The last two lines were beautiful...I know exactly what you're talking about!
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Post by shadowsangel on Nov 24, 2004 13:48:13 GMT -5
yea i know i should not do sertain things when i write songs oh well itt is a old peice on my next submtion ill try and nopt make it rhyme
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