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Post by Yossarian on Nov 23, 2004 17:22:32 GMT -5
All I want is just want to be found. Had to read this a couple of times in order to make sure it wasn't a typo (which you have more than enough of here). It's REALLY awkward. Aside from fixing the typos and changing "u" to "you" (that's one of my major peeves in writing... ), this is fine... Loved the line "take me forsake me rename me"...good stuff!
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Post by shadowsangel on Nov 23, 2004 17:46:11 GMT -5
oppsy my bad i type to fast for my own good i really should read about what im saying ill fix it right away i just read it to myself and i saw the bad typos and anyway thank you im glad that you like it
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Nov 25, 2004 14:37:54 GMT -5
it would be appreciated if you left feedback for others as well, shadowsangel. dark star is not a showcase, its a place where we share and learn with each other.. we cant do that without everyone chipping in a bit of constructive criticism.
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Post by shadowsangel on Nov 25, 2004 15:30:21 GMT -5
i would but im always to nice i have to try have to say quite alot of my work is crap oh well ill do my best i dont really get chance to come on here but im finding time
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