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Jan 12, 2005 20:51:43 GMT -5
Post by Addrienne on Jan 12, 2005 20:51:43 GMT -5
I don't know how I feel about this one.. it doesn't seem right, and I can't think of a melody to it. keep in mind that I'm still lacking inspiration and coping with writer's block. here goes.
"Numb"
I don't know how I feel and I don't know who I feel for and I don't know what I should feel I don't feel anything I am numb
Who are my friends and who are my dates who do I love, and who do I hate why don't I feel anything but numbed pain
I don't know how I feel and I don't know who I feel for and I don't know what I should feel I don't feel anything I am numb
what are my friends and what are my dates what do I love, and what do I hate why don't I feel...
I'm lost inside I'm lost outside I'm lost inside... I'm lost outside...
cold... no one will warm me no one...
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Jan 12, 2005 21:02:55 GMT -5
Post by carpenoctern on Jan 12, 2005 21:02:55 GMT -5
I'm listening to "An Agreement Called Forever" by 36 Crazyfists right now, and as I read this, i can hear your words in place of the lyrics of the song.
This kind of reminds me of "Comfortably Numb" by pink floyd, with the title and depressing feeling.
I actually think this would make a good song.
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Jan 13, 2005 14:12:18 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Jan 13, 2005 14:12:18 GMT -5
I agree with carpe on many levels: 1) the song I'm listening to right now is "somebody" by depeche mode, goes perfectly with this song, which 2) I think would make an unorthodox, but very good song...I can tell you wrote this along with "why" in misc., but I can hear this maybe to a piano solo with some drums...strings perhaps...
loved those lines, addri, spoke to me very personally.
very nice, thought-provoking work,
yoss
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Jan 13, 2005 20:51:08 GMT -5
Post by Addrienne on Jan 13, 2005 20:51:08 GMT -5
thanks for the crit, yoss, it's appreciated.
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Anita
Demon Disciple
Take The Hurt To The Core Of My Heart and Feel it Bleeding, Pounding,Coming Apart.
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Jan 17, 2005 15:10:36 GMT -5
Post by Anita on Jan 17, 2005 15:10:36 GMT -5
I'm lost inside I'm lost outside I'm lost inside... I'm lost outside... My favourite lines,really deep.I agree,it will make a good song!
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Jan 20, 2005 9:03:53 GMT -5
Post by Addrienne on Jan 20, 2005 9:03:53 GMT -5
thanks! the only problem is, I can't compose shit!:sadface:
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Feb 3, 2005 22:02:47 GMT -5
Post by carpenoctern on Feb 3, 2005 22:02:47 GMT -5
I beg to differ on that one. If you think you can't compose shit... man, I don't know... you have some great talents
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Feb 4, 2005 0:30:20 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Feb 4, 2005 0:30:20 GMT -5
umm, carpe? I'm pretty sure she means compose music...
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Feb 6, 2005 17:51:27 GMT -5
Post by carpenoctern on Feb 6, 2005 17:51:27 GMT -5
point taken yoss :lipsrsealedface: no more commenting on poety when i've had too much to drink :grinface:
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