DarkenTheSky
Demon Disciple
Beneath the Watery Lust Garden, my Secret Lies. . .
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Post by DarkenTheSky on Oct 14, 2004 5:08:26 GMT -5
written 2 yrs ago.
“Labeled”
I close my eyes To defy Everyone Who denies Who I am And what I do, But who are you To make me choose? I’m being used By everyone And everything, I didn’t mean For this to be A part of me, But I couldn’t see What was happening (f*ck)
Chorus: f*ck the labels,I'm not your slave to sell, I'm just a nobody here by accident, I don't give a f*ck what the hell - you are, Or who the f*ck you wished you were, I don't care,
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Post by Addrienne on Oct 23, 2004 15:48:52 GMT -5
Wow, I really like these lyrics.. Great job, Darken. As for another stanza, I really can't help you there... Just follow your heart and creativity will take hold.
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Daemonized
Crimson Soul
There are noises in the dark ... the owners of which ... are better not to behold
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Post by Daemonized on Nov 4, 2004 16:14:51 GMT -5
Greetings, I really like the chorus of this song, especially these 2 lines ... 'f*ck the labels,I'm not your slave to sell, I'm just a nobody here by accident,' The main body is good but I would try flesh it out a bit more before adding a second stanza. It makes for a good aggro/industrial ala Ministry type song. Anyway, don't give up on it !!!
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Post by Yossarian on Nov 6, 2004 14:12:53 GMT -5
The main body is good but I would try flesh it out a bit more before adding a second stanza. It makes for a good aggro/industrial ala Ministry type song. Anyway, don't give up on it !!! I agree, this is kind of weak at the moment, and I would try to make it stronger before adding more lyrics. Another thing I would suggest is a thing that some of my favorite bands do--just have a verse and a chorus, and then finish the song by having a long instrumental part...dunno, just a suggestion. Sorry, I'm good at writing my own lyrics but not at adding on to others! Cheers, Yossarian
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