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Post by tearsofblood on Jul 23, 2004 16:33:31 GMT -5
Tears of blood, Hear my cry, Shadows lurk down my spine. Its all a part of a big game. Hurry now, hide your shame. He will take everything you own includeing your soul, all you know will not show. As your body sinks down lower, and lower. You wonder if you know her or is your life just a mother f*cking blur.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 23, 2004 16:36:39 GMT -5
welcome to dark star, tearsofblood.
i had problems putting these words to music.. i am guessing rock or metal?
that second stanza may be more effective if broken up into shorter lines.
nice work. i look forward to reading more poetry and feedback from you. ;D
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Post by LORDMORNINGSTAR on Jul 23, 2004 16:38:57 GMT -5
Only one beef, I'm posotive there's no "e" in including
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