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Post by Yossarian on Dec 3, 2004 16:11:38 GMT -5
Let me out, make me free I love you but you're imprisoning me Your hand's on my soul You won't let go Instead of full, I feel so empty
You're not particulary pretty When you're angry, it's hard not to cry You trap me in my own desire You refuse to let me say goodbye But when you smile-- My heart overflows, I'm ready to go But when you leave me behind-- I just can't make up my mind
Let me out, make me free I love you but you're imprisoning me Your hands on my heart Always ready to start, but Instead of full, I feel so empty
You always tell me you love me When you laugh I fall in love again You tell me to come a little closer Is it such a bad thing to give in to temptation? You always turn away-- But there's little I can do Because when you smile-- I fall back in love with you
Will I be forced into condemnation? Will I be cursed into eternal damnation?
Let me out, make me free I love you but you're imprisoning me You hand's on my soul You won't let go Instead of full, I feel so empty
Let me out, make me free I love you but you're imprisoning me Your hands on my heart Always ready to start, but Instead of full, I feel so empty
Suggestions are extremely welcome.
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Post by LORDMORNINGSTAR on Dec 3, 2004 16:20:35 GMT -5
Your mod influences are showing...
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Post by Yossarian on Dec 5, 2004 13:00:49 GMT -5
:winkface:
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Daemonized
Crimson Soul
There are noises in the dark ... the owners of which ... are better not to behold
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Post by Daemonized on Dec 8, 2004 18:18:08 GMT -5
Greetings,
A bit mainstream but otherwise a very well put together song. Maybe we could collaberate and make an EBM/Death version eh ? hehe.
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Post by Yossarian on Dec 9, 2004 11:51:38 GMT -5
ooo, I like that idea! ;D I agree, this is one of the most mainstream pieces of writing that I've ever done...it broke my writer's block (somewhat--I have it back again), and, as you can see from another poem, "Go With The Flow," I was trying something different. Let's collaberate! (What kind of music do you listen to? I usually listen to techno, but this was meant to be kind of harder rock)
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Post by Addrienne on Dec 13, 2004 17:36:25 GMT -5
Nice. Definitely has a beat to it, and I could see it put together as a song. Me like.
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