Shadosin
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Warning: May Post Childish, Rude, and Unintelligent Remarks.
Posts: 55
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Post by Shadosin on Nov 16, 2003 9:41:29 GMT -5
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In my heart only one stands true You don't know but I sure do Shall I tell or shall I not My brain is tied in a knot I love her now I love her true Everytime I see her my love is renewed She doesn't love my back that I know well She ignores me as she tells Her freinds her gossip I think of that as I stand her with a rope rond my neck How odd interesting now I'm dead Now and forever more
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 12, 2003 21:37:28 GMT -5
I find it particularly interesting how you have ended a couple of your poems the same way. You could perhaps consider doing this in several other, creating a link between a 'series' of poems. I like that idea ;D
Glad to see you're still practising with rhyming. The feelings in your poems are very raw and emotive: a quality that you should try to retain. Keep writing!
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Post by lostandalone on Dec 12, 2003 22:49:54 GMT -5
*looks thoughtfully* hum havent heard thid before, still nice though see the one i put in morbid thoughts ok, 'mike' *little sad laugh*
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