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Post by Lina Inverse on Oct 12, 2003 16:43:57 GMT -5
Attention: Phony doting, Loss of privacy, End of freedom
To do what I need, My only hope To save myself From impending death.
Attention: Sever my ties To my already Diminished rights.
Finally I'll lose it. Spare you from The burden That is me.
Attention: Never for me. Never seek it. Always run away.
Why won't you listen? The last thing I want Is what you claim I cut for.
Attention: False assumption, Stereotype From lack of
Any understanding. Don't judge what you Don't understand. It's even worse than
Attention: End of freedom But nothing more Bearable, slightly.
At least it doesn't Ridicule me. At least it doesn't Destroy me.
Attention Doesn't laugh At its victims For what they're not.
Listen. I'll never be Some little bitch Who wastes her time Crying for
Attention: For babies, But not for Masochists.
We use it for ourselves, Not so we lose freedom If you could only accept That little fact.
Attention. f*ck you. Suffer Alongside me.
That's right. You hate me, So I'll hate you. You criticize me For... That's right.
Attention. What you say I want I say you want. Then we're even.
At least now There's a reason For your sickening ways Of taking those who hurt self
And pushing us further Into the abyss.
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Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 14, 2003 6:34:37 GMT -5
I liked the repition of 'attention' in the poem. It was really very effective and gave the whole thing form and unity.
Also, I loved this stanza in particular: 'Why won't you listen? The last thing I want Is what you claim I cut for.'
The loss of freedom and the pain was really illistrated well.
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