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A Rose
Oct 9, 2003 23:26:31 GMT -5
Post by Lina Inverse on Oct 9, 2003 23:26:31 GMT -5
Chicks dig roses! A red rose Straight from the florist: A sure way To get her past Second base.
He's so sweet! A single rose Proves that he's Got more than cash. So romantic. I think I'll have sex.
But what of the rose? Suddenly snipped With those great shears From its companions. Its life, gone Just for a f*ck.
Author's Notes: This is about a drawing my friend did of a bleeding rose. When I was looking at it, I suddenly felt sympathy with roses and got the ideas for this poem. It's supposed to be mostly about the rose, but it turned out to have only one of three stanzas about it. I don't know whether I should change it or not... Give me your opinion!
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A Rose
Oct 12, 2003 0:33:06 GMT -5
Post by _black phoenix_ on Oct 12, 2003 0:33:06 GMT -5
oooh.. im thinking you should go more into detail with the feelings of the rose. maybe personify the shears as evil or murderous in some way. you could also write about the roses death as a painful and heartless act.
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A Rose
Oct 14, 2003 6:30:06 GMT -5
Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 14, 2003 6:30:06 GMT -5
I did like this rose. It was a very different outlook that most people never think of. I agree that this could be expanded...just because I'd love to read more of it! You could either exapnd on the rose itself, or expand on the people and their feelings, using the rose as a symbol of their supposed love and their act.
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RipperAngel
Dark Initiate
"...where lovers rot..."
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A Rose
Oct 17, 2003 13:58:53 GMT -5
Post by RipperAngel on Oct 17, 2003 13:58:53 GMT -5
oh damn that must be a poor existence if you're a rose...always just killed for a f*ck...hm. I actually liked this just the way it is. it leaves you to your own thoughts.
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