jd
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Post by jd on Apr 25, 2018 14:53:01 GMT -5
As I stare out at the visible silence I see you in the tall gleaming grass. You were mine before, lost in my past.
With humoring rumors of pleasant death You stepped to me and stole my breath. And took my life at such an age Scarcely time to sow my rage My life was played out on your stage.
Lost in love like the moon behind dark trees Your soul revealed the Devil's philosophy. Oh darkened love you did forecast Long would I live with no torturing past.
To ever float on an endless stream Of darkened nights and darkened dreams...
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Post by Lurker on Feb 25, 2019 18:47:07 GMT -5
1st and last were good, the middle was a little murky. If you are going to use punctuation then you should use it properly. I like where you are going. Dig in deep.
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Post by azobetanobeko on Sept 14, 2019 13:46:18 GMT -5
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Post by enivitiqa on Sept 14, 2019 15:26:50 GMT -5
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sik
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Post by sik on Oct 29, 2019 19:41:04 GMT -5
way to promote some solid poetry
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