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go redsox
Jul 3, 2016 23:11:37 GMT -5
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Post by stillmick on Jul 3, 2016 23:11:37 GMT -5
To be myself is nothing more~than trash tossed to the wind Where i will fail you still~my longest dearest friend And leave you on the roads side~longing for my help And that you know will never come~so i am so fuct up
Im sorry My true love Im not to good to you
The cuts i lash in worthess skin~dont fall me from the break Where every move i ever make~is just one more mistake I would love to leave you~an honored death so true But even that i blunder at,~ and am emberased at.. all i leave to you
Are worthless lines. Of love That are nothing in the end
I wish i was a screaming child~falling in a lexington river tide Like every year you hear about~and the sadness,to the open hide I wish i was,that important In my lifetimes lovers mind
But truth to know, i am a worthless cause And all the minutes i wayste in breath A selish wanton cause
You f*ck You worthless f*ck Im so sick of u
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Post by Veritas on Jul 13, 2016 13:45:36 GMT -5
multiple typos, is the obvious gouge.My true impression is that it appears more whining than melancholic, the final bit could be omitted completely and the flesh of the piece itself in compromised. and its overall message is confusing, its seems like a break up, the it takes on the ghosting/ potius pilot approach, by saying " I'm embarrassed at... all I leave you". walk through again , trim some fat & focus.
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