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Post by twistedangel on May 16, 2016 6:11:50 GMT -5
Boredom turn on tablet entire human knowledge at tips Despair descends having not the imagination to search anything new Interests equal nil
Somtime between what was what is and what could have been
I obviously died
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Post by Aish on May 16, 2016 12:42:45 GMT -5
To me this is a nice stream of consciousness piece. You don't beleaguer the process, it's pretty tight. Penultimate and final strophes are flawless.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on May 18, 2016 21:38:49 GMT -5
The last line in the first strophe has a robotic quality. It makes me want to see that expanded on. Eg; searching reminds me of the computer voice on Star Trek (Searching… searching…). That and the no imagination aspect bring the reader real close to this image as it is. "Interests equal nil" reminds me of some of the old coding languages like Cobol.
Very nice reflection on our technological society, and information, and sensory overload.
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