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Post by fourtimefelon on Mar 3, 2015 17:40:37 GMT -5
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Post by vincentaugustemanet on Mar 5, 2015 21:54:38 GMT -5
The topic and narrative is very interesting to me. Unique in a good way, can say I have ever heard anger put like that. Certainly a lot delivers, like the 3rd stanza, deceiver's and pheonix's lines. V cool that you post the video too, so know how it reads and it is brave.
If I had criticism, you should mostly mix up the rhyming more with the shorter style lines. Also, I think anger is disarmed in someways by some of the more hokey supernatural elements. I think thematically the topic is difficult one.
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Post by Aish on Oct 12, 2015 22:13:42 GMT -5
Love it!!!! A well of prescription waters... I have no advice or crit. I am listening to this again.
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Post by awesomebill on Dec 26, 2015 13:41:49 GMT -5
Awee on a mobile phone i dont see it
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