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Post by twistedangel on Sept 24, 2014 2:06:04 GMT -5
Hot waters cascade scolding skin Pain to cleanse pain Srubbing those parts touched Sinful suds gurgle...a vipers laugh
To give freely that which should be held dearly Thrown so cheaply
Scratches, bite marks, scourged last remnants slither between thighs Sins of wanton intimacy blights ones piety
How sweet the apple tasted Bitter consequences squirm In sewage writhes integrity
As Eden falls Adam smirks Eve takes all blame
Union of two her shame to bear alone
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Post by windfog on Sept 26, 2014 5:31:46 GMT -5
Hi, lady! Very provocative piece! "As Eden ... " To my mind Adam was, well, a piece of c..., when he said that he isn't guilty. Though of course there are different opinions. I like this your piece. W.F.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Sept 28, 2014 16:11:14 GMT -5
LOL It's funny and sad, funny because if you can't laugh at it you'll go nuts. Adam is guilty of what most men are, subjugation. Had he been happy with Lilith, as a full partner in all things, I'd be a lot happier today. The blame, and the shame, belong to us all. I love the opening strophe but it's all good
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Post by twistedangel on Sept 30, 2014 10:41:58 GMT -5
next bloke who brags about bein a 'stud' while calling some girl a slag for doing the same thing is gonna get castrated with a broken bottle GRRRRR then am gonna ask the f*cker to write a poem about it
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Oct 1, 2014 16:55:49 GMT -5
I can’t imagine any man ever able to write a poem about castration under any circumstances. LMAO!
Pomp and posturing. I never saw the need for it. Probably a big reason I’m single. Why is it that people feel they have to look better/bigger than others? Anyone who pays attention and has a brain knows the one who puts on the biggest show is over compensating the most. But then, I always wanted to find a woman that recognized my quiet assurance for what it is and I’m still single.
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