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Post by Veritas on Jul 11, 2014 18:48:51 GMT -5
Midnight jewel plucked like a plum sparkling and ripe
final chord struck resonates...
pitch-shifter switched phase, overdrive & reverb...
light socket's got a short .... bulb flickers some all goes dark
been fallin apart since the start of the race skid marks across the finish line are the only trace left behind by our species ... what was the point anyways?
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Post by Bastet on Jul 11, 2014 19:33:54 GMT -5
The first two strophes are a different creature than the rest of the piece, softly melancholic yet sensual, perhaps even loving or gracious. I had trouble following after pitch-shifter, because I was in a sensual sort of vibe up to that point and it immediately made me think of sex, the way couples in the throes of passion change pitches, rhythms, growls etc. Really loved it up to that point. I'm not saying the rest is bad - it just feels like two separate pieces to me. JMO.
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Post by goldfinch on Jul 12, 2014 12:49:36 GMT -5
Wow, great piece!
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Post by twistedangel on Jul 28, 2014 12:55:44 GMT -5
gotta agree (again!) with Bastet about it reading like 2 different pieces am liking the imagery...after some googling...of S1 to S4..is a nice write all on its own S5 tho is really cool an stands out large by itself as for the point...pfft who cares as long as it wos a good laugh...afterlife or not, answers or not, theres F all I can do about it so why worry enjoyed this
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Post by mee on Aug 6, 2014 7:24:16 GMT -5
good question , still triyng to work it out will get back to you on that , like the poem as well :_)
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Aug 6, 2014 16:51:01 GMT -5
LOL As always well written and thought provoking Veritas. I don’t see the two part difference mentioned in previous comments. To me it seems to progress nicely from promising fruit to a bitter/dark end. S3 is not quite how I would describe it but I see how it fits. Love the skid mark analogy BTW. Does there have to be a point? Perhaps it is simply a failed experiment or a chance arrangement by cosmic law and order. One that began with hope and promise in expectations but did not live up to its potential. So much wasted potential… again, love the skid mark. Along the lines of Angel’s thought; it is what it is and there is nothing I can do about it.
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Post by Veritas on Aug 7, 2014 13:48:59 GMT -5
s3 describes a guitar solo change over (they're foot peddles). My main-stay of thought as of late is the unchangeable inter-workings of "The great conundrum" a pastime of mine, not sure if its hobby or obsession. Appreciate you guyz reading & commenting - LMS
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