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Post by twistedangel on Jun 12, 2014 5:46:19 GMT -5
Life is for living treading water, slow drowning dont forget to breathe
sticky liquid pools congeal upon the pavement remnants of the slain
Empty noose swings free As an elm trees leaves in breeze Warning none are free
How much a life worth Medicine all has value Two coins poor must save
Fester in your spite Cant call another man brother I won't burn with you
A face in the crowd More alive than those around Hypnotic beauty
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Post by Bastet on Jun 12, 2014 9:53:09 GMT -5
Life is for living treading water, slow drowning dont forget to breathe You need and apostrophe in don't. Flippin' beautiful.sticky liquid pools congeal upon the pavement remnants of the slain Grody and graphic yet skillful.Empty noose swings free As an elm trees leaves in breeze Warning none are free Painful truth.How much a life worth Medicine all has value Two coins poor must save Fester in your spite Cant call another man brother I won't burn with you A face in the crowd More alive than those around Hypnotic beauty I think this is autobiographical. Very elegant.
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Post by windfog on Jun 15, 2014 6:50:37 GMT -5
Last three lines are killers! Very good work! R.Y.
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Post by Aish on Jul 17, 2014 3:26:14 GMT -5
I'm gonna have to agree with miss golden idol up there. Superb tidy work, Angel.
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