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Post by lightbaron on Dec 29, 2013 19:58:37 GMT -5
the archons are impotent, yet they have their cocks, deep in my doubt she might die by my hands, not deliberately but because the art ran away behind every great man is a thousand vindictive women summoning angry winds to weather raised obelisks I am not a great man these are the long arms of the alarm clock spreading the lily white ass cheeks of a poet who forgot that all the best words were martyred Jedis catch more flys with Amanita than mead, and Jesus is Cubensis but these things can't quite translate when she acts as an aphrodisiac to the default rulers, who've nodded burning holes into the pendulum
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Post by twistedangel on Dec 30, 2013 5:52:57 GMT -5
todays i lernt 3 new words archons, Amanita, Cubensis really nicley worded an again i find theres a real calmness to your writes when reading them that am becoming a big fan of S4L2 just looks ugly maybe split it into 2 lines..maybe me OCD about symmetry but for me it sticks out like you archons cock 'that all the best words were martyred '<<totally adore that line am still unsure wot the ending means ' who've nodded burning holes into the pendulum' but will deffo be reading this again nice
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Post by lightbaron on Dec 30, 2013 16:24:20 GMT -5
Thank you twisted.... I am not overthetop obsessive w symmetry but do agree that line hangs out a bit....don't love the look myself.... "Long arm" somehow gave me an odd justification for leaving it, but truthfully I tried to find a break I liked and didn't.... Your comment is much appreciated
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Jan 1, 2014 19:49:08 GMT -5
Very cerebral in a pleasant way. I love the whole tantric psilocybin effect. The ending reminds me of one I titled “Fickle Bitch.” LOL Angel covered it well. That line (S4, L2) seems a deliberate departure from the rest of the write. Can’t say the image of “spreading the lily white ass cheeks” fit well either. LOL
I always enjoy reading your work.
Thanks for sharing.
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Post by markusmagellus on Jan 10, 2014 11:50:08 GMT -5
The line Angel pulled out is platinum. Wish I'd thought of it.
" Jesus is cubensis" - dude. Duuuude.
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