jaded
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Sept 21, 2013 5:49:38 GMT -5
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Post by jaded on Sept 21, 2013 5:49:38 GMT -5
Washable tears jimbeam; fresh listerene sleepless nights; maybeline I'm a wreck, words wont connect No, its just late, time for bed.
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Post by twistedangel on Sept 21, 2013 7:58:21 GMT -5
"Washable tears" love that line one side of me really likes this short write ..the other is kinda disappointed that the use of some great lines an imagery ended like a wet fart...but then i guess that is kinda the point
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jaded
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Sept 21, 2013 16:55:43 GMT -5
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Post by jaded on Sept 21, 2013 16:55:43 GMT -5
No lol your very right. Late night last minute, agervated. Leaning over table trying to vent but to tired to finish fluently. Would like to take the idea anddo something with it. Didn't think it deserved to b in reg. Forum so I put it in debris. Agree 100% with your lack of participation post and am trying to commit more. 3. Lil ones make me rusty sometimes. Plus I want to learn and need to learn more on form, setup, and basic styles of poetry. Afraid I'm not even familuar with s1 l2 all that I see some of my favorite and most skilled writers use here.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Sept 21, 2013 22:31:38 GMT -5
Love the start and the finish. Mostly because it is so truthfully obvious (ending) and I can so relate. LOL
S1, L1 means stanza or strophe 1, line 1. The first line in the first strophe. Most poems are written as groupings of lines called stanzas or strophes, depending on their structure, that denote an idea or meaning from that group of lines.
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