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Chorus
Jun 2, 2012 1:15:09 GMT -5
Post by Aish on Jun 2, 2012 1:15:09 GMT -5
I broke off two of her fingers,
the green lacy hands reaching, reaching, trembling beckoning me inside, to the faded shadows where time stands and attempts to be still.
Sticky saplings bed into my palm, first outstretched, then curled as a paw.
I wish to growl and unfurl my goddess...
to reach into the past and chant holy words beneath heaven's heavy quilt, raw and awakened in a newly formed world.
Dusk rises like an apparition, cools the air into suspended crystals dancing just above my bottom lip curved, in both inspiration and awe.
Loam reaches out, surrounds my feet and ankles, beckoning. Come, be one and decay beneath the wormy earth and rotting leaves. Replenish the cycle.
One day, my loves... one day I shall join you, and sing the chorus of hosts.
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Jun 2, 2012 2:33:13 GMT -5
Post by LonelyForsaken on Jun 2, 2012 2:33:13 GMT -5
I feel a connection with nature and self that I wish I could express so eloquently. A touch of the animal within too… and more. Your ability to express multiple meanings really seems to have come alive in this as well. Your choice of the word “hosts” for example. I see many of its meanings can and do fit is I read it. In fact I’m having trouble deciding if the prominent meaning is, organism infected by parasite, or somebody entertaining guests. Given that you lead into it with “…one day I shall join you…” and the nature aspect I tend to read it as an organism, meaning the earth, but it means more than that to me. I’m not sure I understand your meaning of the opening though it is captivating. I picture you picking flowers but feel it could mean something more. The overall feeling is death and decay resulting in the inevitable rejoining with that from which you were born and a longing to do so. But as so often happens I’m sure I will have to contemplate it and read it many times to really get it. As one who loves and understands nature I thank you. As a poet
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Jun 2, 2012 20:48:17 GMT -5
Post by shamefulsean on Jun 2, 2012 20:48:17 GMT -5
wow, Im really taken aback by this. Will have to return for more suitable commentary. shame
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Jun 9, 2012 19:11:24 GMT -5
Post by atomicparakeet on Jun 9, 2012 19:11:24 GMT -5
Chorus/paw/growling. Hello, mother wolf! I felt like salivating as I was reading through this. It is primal and alluring.
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