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Post by RisYerg on Jan 13, 2012 5:17:48 GMT -5
Jolly stars wink at each other. I smile at their reflections In your lovely eyes. Gleaming stars ... They are excellently benighted With kisses.
12-21-2010 (edited)
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Jan 13, 2012 22:03:21 GMT -5
Wow! You are on fire Ris. Benighted is a most excellent word choice here. Was the double meaning intentional?
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Post by Aish on Jan 13, 2012 22:07:56 GMT -5
One crit: 'to' in L2 should be 'at'.
This is a gorgeous piece of writing, Ris. I adore it!
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Post by RisYerg on Jan 14, 2012 11:10:17 GMT -5
Thank you, friends! Lady Aish - I can't say "no". I say "yes". R.Y.
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