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Post by Hyde on Sept 16, 2010 7:09:55 GMT -5
What is this that stands in front of me
A pitiful excuse standing oh so bold
Praying to God to show him the light.
He's a fool
an imbecile
a worthless pretender
masquerading simply as nothing more
than nothing at all
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Post by Aish on Sept 18, 2010 5:14:28 GMT -5
"masquerading simply as nothing more
than nothing at all " pssstttt....in this place your whisper thunders...
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Oct 1, 2010 8:27:53 GMT -5
Good to see youre still alive! I tried email/texting.
Youve still got it, Jared. This actually feels more polished than most of your work. A quick, emotional spew.
So, you do think he exists? What points you in that direction?
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Post by Moonstone Maiden on Oct 25, 2010 9:35:47 GMT -5
I read this poem. I got annoyed at the man you wrote about. Made me question my own demands to divine beings. Mission accomplished. Thanks for sharing.
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Post by Veritas on Dec 4, 2010 21:46:14 GMT -5
the begining of the piece is almost identical to the black sabath song "black sabath" where in the line reads : "What is this that stands before me... Figure in black which points at me" etc...
Just made me rck out to the song sorry I got sidetracked but cocaine & methamphetomine use has worn down my already ADD behavior... This piece reminds me EVANGELICALS HA Ha ha.
- LMS
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v1a4mslashn1ne
Dark Initiate
I'll kill you all and put it to song
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Post by v1a4mslashn1ne on Apr 27, 2011 18:03:16 GMT -5
nice.
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Post by ankhkat on May 4, 2011 13:06:47 GMT -5
I connected with this piece and I too felt annoyed at the person you were writing about. Nice job!
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