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Post by xxxmorbiddreamsxxx on May 23, 2008 2:25:11 GMT -5
I'm sorry i failed you as a friend. i wasn't there for you for the last days of school, for being there when my friends needed me the most, i disappeared.
I'm sorry i abandoned you and pushed away your smiles. when i came back i didn't notice you were happy to see me. I thought no one would care. knowing you did is hard to bare.
next year ill do every thing with you. i hate myself for doing this to you.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on May 23, 2008 11:34:58 GMT -5
Im finding it difficult to relate to this piece.. Why were you needed? How much do you hate yourself now? I think some descriptive reasons for your remorse would let your readers connect to this piece better. Try using colourful vocabulary as well.. It can really bring your writing to life and give it that unique, personal feeling.
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Post by naturaldisaster on May 23, 2008 16:06:15 GMT -5
I am understanding and you did vanish. But it was cause of some of the people. To tell you the truth. I forgive you
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Post by Kitten on May 23, 2008 21:57:09 GMT -5
Erm, this reads like a journal entry meant for you and your friends alone. I can't connect either.
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