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Post by MusicalMasterpiece on May 4, 2006 20:51:22 GMT -5
Furious yellow jackets, snakes and spiders, Lightning, thunder, tornadoes, and storm riders. Destruction, poison, stings, and hurt. Disaster relief, and bodies being buried in dirt. Rubble, stress, and everywhere is debris, Spring is the worst season...a complete catastrophe.
Happiness, fun, great pleasure, Baby plant sprouts to measure. Life, sunshine, and pretty flowers. The sun shining for hours and hours. Singing birds, flying kites, and leaf wielding trees. Spring is the best season...best there could ever be.
Pessimistic & Unrealistic? ..................or Optimistic & Artistic?
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Post by Hyde on May 25, 2006 23:36:54 GMT -5
The only part about this entire poem I did not like was the end.
Pessimistic & Unrealistic? ..................or Optimistic & Artistic?
Remove that and it would have such a better emotional connection. This would be a great stand up piece. Kind of a interlude during pieces you could use. I really enjoyed it.
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Post by Dead Moon Child on Apr 17, 2008 10:08:10 GMT -5
I also agree, but love how you had taken a season and create it's opposite.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on May 18, 2008 12:59:23 GMT -5
I like the idea behind the poem, but it just felt like too much of a list for my taste..
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