alekiel
Dark Initiate
never there....
Posts: 55
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She
Jun 11, 2008 12:50:39 GMT -5
Post by alekiel on Jun 11, 2008 12:50:39 GMT -5
She
she`s the dream inside the eye she`s the pain i can`t describe she`s the reason for my sorrow i`m the one with no tomorrow.
she`s the sweet touch of the wind she`s the one that keeps me breathing she`s the voice that makes me wait i`m the one with no escape.
she`s the torment i can`t bare she`s the heart i cannot share....to she`s my feeling for the mortals i`m the one that takes no orders.
she`s the one that isn`t real she`s the one that cannot feel she`s a dream inside my mind i can`t see her......i am blind.
by Alekiel
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She
Jun 12, 2008 9:46:47 GMT -5
Post by Dead Moon Child on Jun 12, 2008 9:46:47 GMT -5
I love this poem deep emtion within each of the stanze. It can touch the core a person soul
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wkdclwn
Dark Initiate
Dimension of Imagination
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She
Jun 12, 2008 17:44:57 GMT -5
Post by wkdclwn on Jun 12, 2008 17:44:57 GMT -5
I agree. Tells a story from each stanza to the next. A very nice ebb and flow to the work. Though the final few lines left me with a confusion; I still very much enjoyed this piece.
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alekiel
Dark Initiate
never there....
Posts: 55
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She
Jun 15, 2008 15:19:29 GMT -5
Post by alekiel on Jun 15, 2008 15:19:29 GMT -5
thx :) this poem represents the evolution in "his" eyes ...of "her" in the 1st stanza - "he" can`t bare the distance between them in the 2nd stanza - "he" shares his feeling for "her" and "his" addiction in the 3rd stanza - "his" love for "her" becomes unbearable and he is becoming to deny it in the last stanza - "he" denies not only "his" love....but denies "her" too
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