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Demons
May 22, 2008 18:39:33 GMT -5
Post by naturaldisaster on May 22, 2008 18:39:33 GMT -5
Swords clash, and friends fight.
Life ends, and Life begins.
Yelling at Rents, and fighting for whats right.
Things just never to seem to go your way. It goes but the opposite and tries to make you crash.
Let the knife skim across your skin mt friend. Life as a teenager is the worst for a emotional being,
I should know... Watching as the red liquid flows from you..
The only time you feel alive. Is when you are in pain.
Demons are to blame. They are the ones who follow you..
Feeding off of your depression.
Making things go wrong so your even worse than ye were before...
Angels are only a myth.
But Demons... I am sorry to say but they had in every dark corner around you.
Demons are the ones to blame. They started the wars. They are the ones who break up couples.
They are to blame.. Not the ones around you.
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Demons
May 24, 2008 23:35:29 GMT -5
Post by xxxmorbiddreamsxxx on May 24, 2008 23:35:29 GMT -5
i believe in those demons.
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Vinyl
Dark Initiate
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Demons
May 27, 2008 14:57:43 GMT -5
Post by Vinyl on May 27, 2008 14:57:43 GMT -5
It's hard to take you seriously after that. As an exercise I would cut your work down. Remove anything that is not crucial to the poem. Anything that doesn't contribute emotion or imagery is unneeded. Hey and try changing up some of the words. A thesaurus is a mighty training tool.
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