alekiel
Dark Initiate
never there....
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Jun 4, 2008 12:48:08 GMT -5
Post by alekiel on Jun 4, 2008 12:48:08 GMT -5
No more
blood shoots loose through my veins... same blood shed on my reign. power pulses into me... rise now....rise ....and see me as i push this over... come now....come....with me... and assist the blood shower...
this can`t end....this just began... this is freedom...from my madness... this, my prison is no more... this, my curse is....sugar-sour
killing numb into myself... pride, despair and my shell, releasing myself into this crude and false world bliss...
reason me for what i am... understand i am no man... hide, attack and flee from me....run with your greed...
you woke this demon deep inside of me...of course you are to die dead no more can i be... free forever....forever free.
by Alekiel
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Jun 4, 2008 21:56:46 GMT -5
Post by lucialee on Jun 4, 2008 21:56:46 GMT -5
I like your style of writing, I hope you don't take this as an insult but what exactly... or should I say who exactly is this about?
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Post by Moonstone Maiden on Jun 5, 2008 0:15:13 GMT -5
OMIGOSH i was just thinking the same thing! You aren't very conciese with what you are saying and you don't seem very succinct.
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Jun 5, 2008 15:20:26 GMT -5
Post by <strip> on Jun 5, 2008 15:20:26 GMT -5
Strong image in the first line. You had me... Until I kept reading.
How long have you been writing poetry? This one feels like it could be metal lyrics if you expanded on the imagery.
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alekiel
Dark Initiate
never there....
Posts: 55
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no more
Jun 10, 2008 12:26:02 GMT -5
Post by alekiel on Jun 10, 2008 12:26:02 GMT -5
been writing for like 3 months... just some thoughts put on a papper......modified a bit
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