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Post by ImpendingDoom on Dec 16, 2005 19:03:51 GMT -5
i feel so... trapped, with all this shit building up around me. when wil i be free? free from my dark, foul tomb. wait.... i think i see something.... the light.... at the end of the tunnle. yes, i will be free, free to live outside this... lonely, loathsome cage of restraint. freedome! freedome! i've escaped, but wait.... whats going on? i'm falling into... another tunnle. noooooooo!
the moral of the story is, just when you think you have what you want, it all goes right down the drain.
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Post by shamefulsean on Dec 22, 2005 3:19:43 GMT -5
**wretch** **shakes head in hilarity, desperate sad,distrubed hilarity** shame
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Post by MirrorImage || egamIrorriM on Dec 23, 2005 3:05:58 GMT -5
thats doom for ya...wow...
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Post by ImpendingDoom on Jan 4, 2006 17:04:31 GMT -5
thanks dudes, much appreciated.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Jan 24, 2006 15:18:10 GMT -5
to be perfectly honest, i didnt find it all that funny.. more depressing than anything you could throw in some creative poetic devices to colour this piece a bit. but thats just my opinion..
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Post by ImpendingDoom on Jan 25, 2006 22:30:43 GMT -5
it is suppose to be ironic. and in my opinion, i find irony funny. but your right, it could be better.
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Post by Reaper696 on Jan 26, 2006 12:27:11 GMT -5
"Out one end, in the other"...
BP said it for me, though I do find the satire within this. I don't really see this as irony though, no juxtapose anywhere...
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Post by colourlessthoughts on Jan 31, 2006 17:17:15 GMT -5
if you focus on the fact that you are writing of a piece of shit coming out of your ass... this is soooo f u c k i n g funny, but as leash pointed out.. without the thought of shit(which she probably wasnt thinking of).. this could be a sad piece of writing, but only with a different title.. nice job..
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littlewhipmaker
Demon Disciple
Who understands pleasure, without a little pain...
Posts: 438
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Post by littlewhipmaker on Feb 1, 2006 0:58:52 GMT -5
ok...poetry on crap....well...i'll be damned...LOL...i think i identify
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lxlxangelicxlxl
Crimson Soul
I have the will to live, Death... be my guide
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Post by lxlxangelicxlxl on Jul 11, 2006 11:41:44 GMT -5
Ahhhhh yesss i loved it!!!
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