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Oct 26, 2005 18:28:13 GMT -5
Post by MirrorImage || egamIrorriM on Oct 26, 2005 18:28:13 GMT -5
strip away all ill-intent, F*ck me gladly, not ill-wrent, men will be as girls want toys, twist their hearts, theirs to destroy.
simple mind, walk through the park, fools and lives, company soon part, girls will fight as boys get past, twist their words, their piece of ass.
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Oct 27, 2005 13:46:57 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Oct 27, 2005 13:46:57 GMT -5
I was tempted to move this to humour, because I found this seriously funny (esp. the last two lines), although not one of your strongest poems, it was quite amusing.
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Oct 27, 2005 16:06:02 GMT -5
Post by MirrorImage || egamIrorriM on Oct 27, 2005 16:06:02 GMT -5
you should move it, i was writing it with a sort of ironic chuckling attitude.
not really meant to be extremely good, i composed it on the spot, but now that i look at it again, it is pretty funny.
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littlewhipmaker
Demon Disciple
Who understands pleasure, without a little pain...
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Nov 13, 2005 23:32:56 GMT -5
Post by littlewhipmaker on Nov 13, 2005 23:32:56 GMT -5
Funny? hmmm.... dark humor? well ok....evil mean grin kind of humor...
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Nov 23, 2005 16:00:02 GMT -5
Post by PalaceWhore on Nov 23, 2005 16:00:02 GMT -5
agree w/ the said above last 2 lines are pretty funny.
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Nov 24, 2005 16:23:52 GMT -5
Post by MirrorImage || egamIrorriM on Nov 24, 2005 16:23:52 GMT -5
thanks..
yeah, i guess it would be darker.
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Dec 6, 2005 12:46:38 GMT -5
Post by shortdaowey on Dec 6, 2005 12:46:38 GMT -5
Hey I thought your poem was really good.
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