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Post by colourlessthoughts on Oct 16, 2005 1:52:20 GMT -5
Dewy little dew drops being flicked by these finger tips as i awake from the drunken night in wet grass Now i got wet clothes f*ck! my toes are cold This lady walking her dog tries to give me buck Thinks i am down on my luck So I take it of coarse, thinking free coffee But I tell her "hey, it was a late night and my sloppy drunk feet couldnt walk anymore, although home is right there bitch"as i point across the street "Yeah my house is nicer than yours"
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Post by dyosa on Nov 9, 2005 12:35:23 GMT -5
A real funny one scenical poem. nice one, dude Just watch the spelling Peace
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Post by ImpendingDoom on Nov 12, 2005 20:00:07 GMT -5
now that tickled my funny bone just right.
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DarkenTheSky
Demon Disciple
Beneath the Watery Lust Garden, my Secret Lies. . .
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Post by DarkenTheSky on Feb 14, 2006 6:41:50 GMT -5
haha, that's f*cked up. ;D the first stanza had really nice imagery and rhythm, and the second one rhymed, and the last one through in the sarcastic humor, so technically, this one's got it all, right? something about this piece seems more clever that you'd think. . . .
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lxlxangelicxlxl
Crimson Soul
I have the will to live, Death... be my guide
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Post by lxlxangelicxlxl on Jul 11, 2006 11:41:03 GMT -5
Hahah that was funny and yes very fcked up but good none the lss.
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