anubis13lade
Dark Initiate
life is judged by the unjudgable's
Posts: 74
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Aug 27, 2005 17:40:34 GMT -5
Post by anubis13lade on Aug 27, 2005 17:40:34 GMT -5
You are burnt sienna stuck to a blanket, raw umber on the doctors gloved finger, a secret ochre on peach coloured triple ply. You are the untouchable
turd at the end of a stick, protesting dirtily. Soil of soiled underpants, threatening to collide with a fan, a happening in nappies.
You are the word at the brunt, and the rising spires left by dogs; impasto in the tread of my shoe, printed on carpet.
You are the peeping brown crayon, solar eclipsing, and the toad, dumped in the porcelain hole, never going home.
I sprinkle you with hundreds and thousands, award you each a union jack on a cocktail stick.
You are the movement and the mythic brick. O happy is the pig in you
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anubis13lade
Dark Initiate
life is judged by the unjudgable's
Posts: 74
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sh*t
Aug 29, 2005 19:00:02 GMT -5
Post by anubis13lade on Aug 29, 2005 19:00:02 GMT -5
no feed back i geuss no one liked this o well i shal try harder you will see you will see
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sh*t
Aug 29, 2005 19:06:11 GMT -5
Post by carpenoctern on Aug 29, 2005 19:06:11 GMT -5
hummmm, overall, i really like it. There was some fabtabulous imagery woven throughout your words which gives me a feeling of something slightly not of this world (or "otherworldly") depending on you preference. To be completely honest, it kind of reminded me of being tripped up on acid, it is that kind of surreal feeling. But posting it under "humor"? i didn't find it overly funny, but it was an awsome trip into your minds creative side. Oh, and, you have to be patient for reviews, they just don't come flowing
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anubis13lade
Dark Initiate
life is judged by the unjudgable's
Posts: 74
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sh*t
Aug 30, 2005 20:10:54 GMT -5
Post by anubis13lade on Aug 30, 2005 20:10:54 GMT -5
lol i no im very unpashent and i geuss im not very good at puting my poems were they should realy go and acid trip yeah i guess so thanks but evrey one one nose sh*t is funny
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Sept 6, 2005 16:58:43 GMT -5
Post by _black phoenix_ on Sept 6, 2005 16:58:43 GMT -5
damn creative! a lot of unique imagery/ideas thrown together. great diction and word choice. thanks for sharing your shit with us, anubis.
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sh*t
Sept 6, 2005 17:03:38 GMT -5
Post by Aish on Sept 6, 2005 17:03:38 GMT -5
i want to say...brilliant repugnance...dude, seriously, I love it *walks off laughing*
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Sept 7, 2005 2:44:20 GMT -5
Post by Moonstone Maiden on Sept 7, 2005 2:44:20 GMT -5
'turd at the end of a stick, protesting dirtily. Soil of soiled underpants, threatening to collide with a fan, a happening in nappies.'
;DCan't stop smiling.
'You are burnt sienna stuck to a blanket, raw umber on the doctors gloved finger, a secret ochre on peach coloured triple ply. You are the untouchable'
Where do you come up with lines like that? Loving it...
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Sept 7, 2005 13:38:00 GMT -5
Post by freaknumero21 on Sept 7, 2005 13:38:00 GMT -5
randy this is sean I thought it was hillarious that and do you know what repugnance means?
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anubis13lade
Dark Initiate
life is judged by the unjudgable's
Posts: 74
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sh*t
Sept 7, 2005 20:20:32 GMT -5
Post by anubis13lade on Sept 7, 2005 20:20:32 GMT -5
i thank you all for the feed back and i dont know just thot it was some funny stuf thanks people loveing the atentioin
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lxlxangelicxlxl
Crimson Soul
I have the will to live, Death... be my guide
Posts: 108
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sh*t
Jul 11, 2006 11:45:35 GMT -5
Post by lxlxangelicxlxl on Jul 11, 2006 11:45:35 GMT -5
Their is another poem in here with the same title lol but anyways it was great. Put a big grin on my face
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Aug 25, 2006 18:44:09 GMT -5
Post by demonchild on Aug 25, 2006 18:44:09 GMT -5
gr8 now i can sleep better at night knowing some one feels the same way i do.
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